Formal Letter
Dear Professor Brad,
I am Pua Suan Ting, a student from your effective
communication class T6. My purpose of writing this letter is to introduce
myself. I studied in Ngee Ann Polytechnic and graduated with a Diploma in
Automation and Mechatronics System.
During my internship in polytechnic, I found out that the
things I have learnt in school were very fundamental and that there were still
many things which I did not know. Therefore, I decided to continue my education
by studying mechanical engineering in Singapore Institute of Technology in
order to equip myself with the necessary knowledge and skills before I go out
to work.
My strength in communication is that I am a good listener
and I am open to different ideas. During group discussion for projects, I always
listen out for the things my groupmates say especially when they are talking
about their ideas or challenges faced while they are trying to do their part. I
believe that listening to others can help me to learn as they allow me to see
things in another perspective which I might be unaware of. As for my weakness,
I am afraid of speaking in front of a crowd. For example, I always feel so
nervous during presentation in class that I cannot speak properly or I will forget
what I am supposed to say.
I hope that by the end of this module, I am able to improve
on my writing and I am able to overcome my fear of public speaking. I know that
speaking in front of people will not be easy for me but I hope that I can at
least start with a smaller crowd like my class.
Yours sincerely,
Suan Ting
Edited on 28 January
Besides some minor grammatical errors, this letter is really good! It is clear, concise and flows really well from one paragraph to the next. However, your letter does not explain explain your personal interest in engineering as a whole.
ReplyDeleteHi Suan Ting
ReplyDeleteGood to know more about you through this letter. The letter is well written and its clear in every paragraph. I agree with Christine on the part that it can be a little clearer on explaining your personal interest in engineering as a whole.
cheers
Dear Suan Ting,
ReplyDeleteThank you for this fairly fluent, clear and concise letter. You cover the basics of the various assignment requirements and add some concrete detail, especially in terms of your interest in MEC, your goals for the module and strengths and weaknesses in comunication. I'm impressed by the frank discussion of what you need to improve.
I hope to see you expanding your vocal engagement with the class as yo speak this term. I realize that wearing a mask is cumbersome. Please try your best.
While this letter is fluent, there is one sentence with an issue with the use of verbs:
-- I found out that the things I have learnt in school was very fundamental and that there are still many things which I did not know. > (subject-verb agreement and tense issue)
I found out that the things I have learnt in school were very fundamental and that there were still many things which I did not know.
I look forward to working with you further this term.
Cheers,
Brad